cleverclogs

Hello there, and I wish you a somewhat belated welcome to YWS! First things first: I can't tell if this is meant to have punctuation or not. You have a ...

Hello, cleverclogs here to review as requested! :) I don't know the technicalities of a sonnet, so I can't really review the... sonnet-ness of this, so I'll focus on content. ...

Hello there! And welcome to YWS, by the way. :) I have one small nitpick before I review content: He tore is gaze away from the small imperfection and carried ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS! First, nitpicks. There wasn’t anyone in the main offices ; the cubicles all sat empty and silent, making the sounds of her heels all ...

Hello, there, and welcome to YWS! :) So, first things first: Your whole first paragraph is a gigantic info-dump. It's tiring on the eyes. I can't tell if it's supposed ...

Hello, ThereseCricket. :) Wow. You say poetry isn't your strong point. If this is what you write being fairly inexperienced with poetry, I'd love to see what you'd do with ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS, by the way. :) This is a pretty nice poem, but I do have some suggestions. As the previous reviewer pointed out, the rhythm is ...

Hello there! I am not a poet, and this is not a particular kind of poem. But I am open to ridicule, because I think poetry is beautiful and I ...

Hello there! First, nitpicks! Jasper walked down the crowded street with purpose and an heir of cold determination that emanated off of him in waves. I believe you meant air ...

Hello there! This made me smile. It's cute and funny, and I loved all the puns. The dough to buy them, feeling crummy ... not to mention Post Traumatic Bake ...

Hello there! This is really good! I interpreted it as a metaphor for society and how it changes us, and you did an excellent job of it. I love how ...

Hello, there! The first thing I'm going to say is that you have a very poor attitude about your writing. It seems to me that because you got some negative ...

Hello, there! So, first things first. I really loved your style of writing. It was very lyrical and poetic-sounding. They way you describe things is just beautiful, and I'm more ...

Hello, there! Ooh, a riddle! Like Willowpaw, I'll guess at the end, but this should be interesting to review! She also pointed out your grammatical errors, so I'll leave those ...

Hello there! So, the first thing I have to say, is why are you posting just a summary? I realize that summaries are intended to grab readers' attention and convince ...