bubblewrapped

I think this is a great poem, particularly the way you repeat the first lines as the last - a very effective ending. "I walk alone. My existence-- Means nothing. ...

Aww, that poem is so sweet! I love it. Particularly the inversion in the first stanza - "I need you/as you need I" - very clever. My only little bits ...

Definitely depressing, lol. I agree with faith, the rhyme scheme is awkward and surprising (although thats not necessarily a bad thing, it does read kind of stilted). You could try ...

I really enjoyed this poem - my only major criticism is that its too short! LOL But the ending is well done, very sharp and pointed - kind of like ...

I agree with faith - I didnt like this as much as I liked your previous poem. It doesnt seem to flow very well, although that could just be because ...

Overall, its a great poem - I like the transition at the end from describing perfection (or close to it) then saying that America will fall that day; talk about ...

I think this poem is OK - it obviously has good intentions and the concept behind it is a good one, with a solid basis of emotion and great potential ...

I like the concept behind this - I can definitely relate. The rhyme style isnt one I would have chosen (I'm prejudiced against certain styles, lol) but that's just me. ...

"Things I think about in the shower. " I really love this line, primarily because, as carsandguitars said, it does throw you off. I like the way it makes it ...

LMAO thats both cute and funny...I like the use of "Oh", it gives it the exaggerated sense of a love poem - to a shirt! It cracks me up. Like ...

I love this poem! There's too much I like to tell you everything, but the parts that I felt were the best were the first stanza, the almost anti-climactic way ...