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I know you didn’t want people to focus on the punctuation, but I think it would help make sense of your poem, so I’m going to touch it up anyway, ...

Hi KailaMarie! Here's your review, as requested :) I liked the imagery in this poem – your writing is very evocative. There were a few things I thought could be ...

A beautiful piece; stylistically accomplished and thematically unique. You did very well with the sestina (to the best of my limited knowledge, anyway) and I absolutely love some of the ...

That was beautiful! As I read it, it felt like I was half a step behind until then end, when everything came together and (like the poet's fingertips) exploded in ...

Hey CK Lynn! Here’s your review, as requested ;) Overall, I liked the poem; you stuck to the form very well and in several places the repetition was quite effective. ...

I really love this poem. It's got a great tone to it that really suits the subject matter. I loved this part in particular: So you think your husband ever ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a good start with this poem; I really love the concept. Before I get into a critique, however, I'd just like to remind ...

OK, a couple of things: 1. darko.demark666 , please refrain from using chatspeak in the forum and from insulting other members. You're entitled to your opinion, but calling Thien a ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a good start with this poem; I love the rhythm, although I think you need to add a bit of punctuation to help ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a good start with this poem; I like the concept, although I think it would benefit from a bit more punctuation and a ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a good start with this poem; the rhyming is hardly forced at all and the rhythm works well with the subject matter. You ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! Before I get fully into a critique, however, I'd just like to remind you of the site rules (see HERE for more info). YWS has ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a good start with this poem; I like the concept, although I think it could use a bit more punctuation to help the ...

Edited to remove (I'm assuming) your name from the end. Just as a matter of 'net safety it's better not to give your full name online - you never know ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS! You've made a pretty good start with this poem - I like the concept and you express yourself well. Before I get any further into ...