artybirdy

Lightening . Raining. Thunderstorm. Noices of insects. A man sleeping on his bed. Restless. The name of the man is Ghosh. Suddenly gets up and sits. Bewildered. Looks around. I ...

I liked the message behind your short story. It is heart touching and encourages people to not give up and lose hope. You have shown how an accident can change ...

This poem is so romantic! To me, it reflects the idea that regardless of all ups and downs, the speaker and their partner will remain strong and stay united. It's ...

I love your incorporation of the flashback into the reality and the conflict between her and the narrator. It’s almost like a film is being shown to me. Well done ...

I’m speechless! Your story’s a hidden gem. It must gain the recognition it deserves. I can’t believe I didn’t start reading it before. It’s absolutely flawless – it’s perfect! . ...

I really hope there’s another part to this! If not, I’ll cry. The mystery you have created and the little cliffhanger you have given us won’t let me sleep tonight. ...

I haven’t read the previous reviews, so I apologise if I’m only repeating what they might have also mentioned. You have a basic idea laid out – all you need ...

Wow! This was breathtaking and heart touching. Your descriptions were vivid, very powerful. They left a lasting effect on me. To me, this story is an example of a perfect ...

*cough cough* It’s hard to believe that this is coming from you . I mean, you did admit that you didn’t like romance. xD On a serious note, it’s a ...

Hey! First of all, if the Italics are her thoughts, they shouldn’t have speech marks; otherwise, it looks like she’s having a conversation. The “her” in “I don’t know why ...

Hello, SinfullyGorgeous! I’ll start off with your improvements. 1. You often slip from past to present tense and this affects the consistency. For example, in the first sentence you said ...

Oh, my God! I'm speechless. The intense emotions you have managed to evoke from me, as your reader, is absolutely surprising. The last sentence, man, I don't know why but ...

I think this short story is perfect. You built up the tension, thrill, and suspense. I loved your descriptions, too, especially when Harold finds his friend. I could imagine him ...

That was creepy and horrifying! I thought it might be a tragic story, since you mentioned you'd be writing one. However, you caught me off guard - and in a ...

Though a good start, it's still not catchy enough to compel a reader to carry on. To immerse us in your writing, take some time to describe your characters’ surroundings, ...