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This is a light-hearted poem, and I could relate to it. I enjoyed reading it. I mutter to myself. I felt that, that broke the rhythm of your poem. In ...

Couple of nitpicks: I know this all too well. Yet human nature bids us to try Romance may be daunting I loved your poem because it’s realistic and sheds light ...

I’m not sure if the humour was intentional, but I was definitely laughing. I thought it was a man she fancied, but then your descriptions puzzled me. I thought, “How ...

I enjoyed reading this humorous short story. It’s an original concept, to me at least, and I feel that you have executed it very well. Like others, I have noticed ...

I have noticed a couple of punctuation and grammar errors, but I’m sure they can be easily fixed. I don’t think you have repeated yourself in the end. To me, ...

Hello! I’m here to review. You have maintained my interest right until the end. I can already sense the tension and his mother’s taunts only make it worse. She seems ...

The first paragraph is massive and it seems to go on and on. I’d advise you to separate it out to build up the suspense, leaving the readers eager to ...

I’m glad you put up the introductory chapter. It helps a lot and makes it easier for us – people who haven’t watched the show – to understand the story ...

This is the first chapter of your story and I’d say it needs improvement. In order to string along your readers until the end, the starting chapter becomes very important ...

I'm here to review! Emma woke up in the hospital. Here, you're telling us the story. Give us descriptions/details to imagine it. Remember the rule of "show, don't tell" in ...

This gave me the shivers! You had provided details of “experiments” Derrick had done, and I found it horrifying. I think that only the dare bit is cliché. You could ...

Couple of nitpicks: She tries to act like she is tough and like she won't cry, Yet when she thinks of those people who will die , Every now and ...

This seems like a poem made on the spot! It’s short, but accurately portrays the situation of a depressed person. I can tell that the speaker’s stuck in an abusive ...

To me, this poem has set a dark and depressing mood. It gave me an insight into the speaker’s internal struggle to find their happiness, and how they wish to ...

This story reflects societal pressures and demands. The message you might have tried to portray has reached me. I think that this piece mostly highlights the fact that differences shouldn’t ...