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Yay! You posted something! This makes me so happy. There were many part so this that made me laugh out loud, because I totally know people like this. I was ...

The rise of empires, and the fall of tyrannies. Humanity expanded throughout the stars, that curiosity, that brilliantly impervious outlook of, oh, we will just because we can, oh, you ...

I really liked how you explored this. Immortality is an interesting concept, since so many people, at least in fiction, are seeking after it, yet you're right, it does have ...

Hey there. Since you were so gracious to review for me when you knocked off the time, I wanted to do the same(That sounds super snarky but I promise I ...

I love the way you wrote this! I was so fresh and creative! Well done. But I do have nitpicks. A kid's dad worked in the office, and discovered that ...

When writing is first person, we know if your character narrates something, then they see it, hear it, think it, know etc...without you having to tell us. Since every word ...

Hey there. Sorry to jump in without having read the other stuff, but I'll try to still be helpful. Let's start with the nitpicks: His bed, one that looked too ...

really nice piece. It felt cool and edgy, and not because there was snow. Here are some nitpicks for ya. Her eyes, the red, the piercing red, it runs through ...

Funny story. At first I thought Jalil's name was Jail, and I was like, that's a cool name! To be fair, Jalil is a also a cool name. Even though ...

Hey there. I haven't read any previous chapters, so maybe this question would be answered if I had. You say she spent Saturday by the lake, but then you talk ...

By the time ce reached cer square, Jazai was missing three flowers of the eight from the tie. ??????? Are these typos? NO, they're not, at least the first one ...

Hey there. I'm going to start by saying I loved your first paragraph, especially the first line. It was a perfect introduction to your story. And it was powerful very ...

Hey there, so having not read the previous chapters, I was only a little confused, so that's good. I like the use of the flash back, it weaved in well ...

Me again. Hopefully you're not sick of me yet :) Is there a reason it's all bolded? I guess it doesn't really matter, I'm just wondering if it serves a ...

It's me again. I still love your writing, but I'll skip my fangirling and move into the critique. Here are my nitpicks: The moth-eaten curtains swayed in an eerie gesture ...