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This is so thought provoking, it's really interesting. The rhyme kept it from becoming boring and added to the rythm. I really enjoyed this, keep writing. :)

Hello again :) Yet another great installment, well done. However, there were a lot of mistakes again so you really need to proof read. For instance when you are abbreviating ...

This is so funny! It's really good, no wonder you got published. Keep writing, I'd love to read more of your work. :)

I found this really interesting. I think you used the word "introvert" a few too many times, even if you were going for repetition, and I would suggest looking up ...

I really love this... It's like you get a different meaning every time you read it, which is an amazing thing for a poem to do. I loved the repetition ...

I loved this so much. I like how the sentences are just as broken as the things you're describing. I love the idea that she hides the fact that she ...

Oh my god. This is actually amazing! The first sentence totally dragged me in and I was completely gripped all the way though. Your personification of dawn was so effective. ...

Hi, I can't believe how much this has improved from your first chapter! It could still really do with a decent proof read as I spotted a few grammar and ...

Hey, I actually really enjoyed this, it wasn't too long for a chapter at all! I thought you started of really strongly with good writing and a believable main character. ...

This was interesting, it really draws in the reader and makes you feel empathy for the girl. the stage directions made it easy to imagine how it would look on ...

Hi, I really enjoyed reading this. It's a really interesting idea and I think you portrayed Malisa very well. Like PurpleandBlue, I didn't quite understang why the Nurse was so ...

I really enjoyed reading this. The casual rhyme scheme keeps the rythm whilst not sounding forced, the conversational language keeps the reader interested and your message is portrayed perfectly. Only

This is really good, it gave me chills! Only minor criticism is that you don't need to start every line with a capital letter if it's not the start of ...

I really like this poem, very sweet and heart-warming! "Snow is falling lightly, softly landing on shingled rooftops, ornate flakes expanding. And within seconds, there are children small Getting to ...

I really, really love this. I particularly like how the lines are all quite short which gives the idea the narrator in panicy and irrational. I love the description of ...