This poem was really great! I enjoyed reading it and I found it interesting, had good humor creative and it seems like you put a lot of thought and effort into writing this piece of poetry.
I haven't got much to critique on this so this will be a very short review.
As much as I loved it there were some moments when you went off rhythm but there weren't many of those.
And he also comes with a bonus;
A helpful doctor friend
While your man does all the thinking,
His assistiant sees you through to the end
Here you misspelled "assistant" remember to spell-check.
You need him to keep a secret?
Just tell him so at the start.
He’ll swear his live to secrecy
He’ll never tell any part
The second line feels a bit off to me anyways, I'd just remove the word "so."
That's all i have to say really so keep writing and well done
-Infinity x
Points: 9869
Reviews: 116
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