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How do you know?

by thetraveler


How do you know the fat ones
Don't want to be thin?
How do you know the losers
Don't want to win?
How do you know the shy ones
Don't want to roll the dice?
How do you know the mean ones
Don't want to be nice?
How do you know the gamblers
Don't want to be obsessed?
How do you know the sad ones
Don't want to be depressed?
How do you know the quiet ones
Don't have something to say?
How do you know the lonely ones
Don't also want to play?
How do you know the slow ones
Don't wish to be quicker?
How do you know the drunk ones
Don't wish to be rid of their liquor?
How do you know the broken ones
Don't need to be fixed?
How do you know the indifferent ones
Don't have their feelings mixed?
How do you know the sweet ones
Don't sometimes turn sour?
How do you know the late ones
Don't get the extra hour?
How do you know the single ones
Don't want to have a wife?
How do you know we all
Don't need a pretty life?

(thank you, thank you, thank you very much)


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Fri Mar 22, 2013 4:26 pm
Notapoet says...



I like it. It is childlike, in a positive way. Brings me back to times when I began questioning life in my early teens. This is lovely. Very simple and innocent.




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Sun Jun 24, 2012 9:51 pm
KRose wrote a review...



BRAVO! *Cheers as you bow a million times* *CLAP CLAP*.
Okay, this was great! I feel like this-- often. I like how every other line is a question that starts with "don't" and the other ones start with "How do you know". It makes for a very interesting one. I just love how-- it rhymes SO much! How in the world do you do that??
Anyhow, 10/10 for me!
Keep writing!
KRose




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Raelyn723 wrote a review...



Wow. This is really amazing. It's really relatable and I can feel exactly what your talking about! I really like the way you kept the beginning of each stanza the same, it added to the flow of the poem. I honestly don't have anything bad to say about this! Great job and keep writing!!!!




thetraveler says...


Thanks! I am working on the fanfic.... slowly, but surely :) It's getting there
~Trav



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Wed Jun 06, 2012 3:59 pm
anna91423 wrote a review...



This is so thought provoking, it's really interesting. The rhyme kept it from becoming boring and added to the rythm. I really enjoyed this, keep writing. :)




thetraveler says...


Thanks! Again, it's much appreciated
:D



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Wed Jun 06, 2012 2:04 am
silverfin713 wrote a review...



This is a cool poem! The concept is interesting and the rhyme adds a good word flow. It raises some good, thought provoking questions and the last sentence ties it up nicely. You put enough stanzas to intriuge the reader but not so much that they're bored. Keep writing!




thetraveler says...


Thanks!
much appreciated :)




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