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Completely discouraging! Please paragraph your work! You're keeping people from reading it. Even I haven't read it yet.

Interesting, but unrefined. The juxtaposition of the quotes were confusing at certain points. You need to work on your spacing in order to gain the tolerance of readers. What was ...

Well, this is surely an interesting piece. Although for a chapter it's a bit -or very - short. I don't know what the poem overhead was all about, but since ...

An individual, among individuals, inhabiting the planet Earth, in the solar system. An interesting piece you've got here. To be honest, I didn't get it the first time I read ...

Wow! I could really feel the emotions pervading through the words! It seems real...a little too real. I would have criticized the lack of appropriate spacing, if not for the ...

Hello, You have an interesting story here. I like it, but there are a few flaws I would like to point out. Firstly, APPROPRIATE SPACING is one of the pedestals ...

Hello, Here's my review: I understand you're new at this and I have to say, your idea is nice. Basically, you have an interesting plot. However, the style, grammar and ...

Ah, a classic story you got there. This is only my opinion and not a correction: fiancé's drama and mistakes." I think it'd sound better if it were "mistakes and ...

So a guy stabbed himself in his girlfriend's presence...and then proposed to her? He brought a knife and a wedding ring (to use them both) to propose to his girlfriend. ...

Wow, a little over-imaginative there aren't we? I like the whole concept of celebrity taking a fan to her prom. However, the way you presented that concept is in every ...

As great as the story is, it's too simple. It's follows a direct - wedding - death - suicide - process with not much elaboration on any of the phases. ...

It's a good thing this is in the lyrics section and not the poetry section. It looks like you put in a lot of work in this rap. To be ...

I like the whole concept of mystery. However, there are a few correction that ought to be made: I think you mean 'crack of dawn', and not 'crack of don' ...

I understand you're 14 and have an over imaginative imagination. Even though it's difficult to regulate your novelty. However, here are a few things I'd like to point out. Santa ...

Paragraphs young grasshopper, paragraphs. I sighed immediately I saw this blob of words without spacing. It discourages people from reading further. Your title is unorganized and not presentable. It s