WritingWolf

Vary nice! I think most of what I had to say has already been said. I think you're a vary talented writer and I can't believe I didn't know that ...

I agree with unsocialbutterfly and tribee91, you did an amazing job. I really enjoyed reading this; and I hope to hear more from you soon!

On the last line of the second stanza you wrought tomorrow "tehmrow" I know you did it intentionally but when I go to read it I want to read "temohow" ...

I really liked it and didn't see much to critique. One thing I did see is in the third stanza I feel the storm, Ringing in me. The great boom ...

I didn't see much. All my suggestions are in parentheses. I lie and wait, A captive of the eyes in the tree.(this line doesn't really rhyme) Minions of life's army; ...

all my suggestions are in parentheses. Every second that goes by, I feel like I'm going to die. We all will, someday. Imagine... Death. The word we fear, each time ...

I don't really have much to say, but here goes... To be a part of what has become, To be a single leaf. To have a life of endless love, ...

I didn't see much, but everything I did id in (). A metamorphosis: the pale blue sky slowly emerges gently crawling out of her dark black bed. The air is ...

I'm not the best at poetry, but I'll try to be of some help. All my suggestions are in (). I have longed for this day, The day you would ...

I'm not the best at poetry, but what suggestions I have will be in (). You slowly hold out your hand to me, And I slid mine into yours, Fear ...

My smile isn't pretty My teeth are crooked, too. My hair is all a mess, So what? I'm not hear to please you.(tis good) I don't wear any makeup,(I cant ...

In the distance I can hear, Screams of long and distant fears.(good) In the distance I can see, Shots of guns, no referees.(referees???) I can feel the coming war. I ...

my suggestions are in (). ^~~~~*~~~~^ The pain is so powerful(,) His heart was hurting, For he was not too careful, It hurt so bad that he could feel the ...

my suggestions are in (). *~~~~^~~~~* All my worries and secrets(put a comma and take out the are? if you like how it sounds that is.) are locked away. I ...

my suggestions are in (). *~~~~^~~~~* A silver path is trailed with lace(,) It leads me to a better place(,) And overhead the sky is blue(,) The flowers bloom with ...