Wonder

I love this!! :D It flows really well, has a good beat to it, and explains rumors perfectly. Great job! ;) I like how at the end, you wrote: Part. ...

Ooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhh I am HOOKED! :D Nice job! But I have one question, were the words in italics Lilith's thoughts, or where they just information so that the reader would know ...

That third and fourth stanza kind of doesn't flow very well..... But it is still really good. I love your poems a lot. :D I love the second to last ...

Very nice, Mystogan. :D Good job! Apart from the formatting (but that's okay :]) I don't see anything wrong with this. You used 'I' a lot to start you're sentences, ...

I reviewed your first chapter, then realized you had already posted your second chapter, so I'll just repeat what I said for your first chapter. Detail. Description. Describe what the ...

Nice job, I am totally interested. I'd like it if you described what the narrator looks like (I have a thing with knowing what the characters look like >.

This is so FUNNY!!! I started smiling at the first stanza, and by the time I read the last line I was full out laughing!! My acne isn't very bad, ...

Beautiful. I swear, my heart just twisted as I read the last stanza. My eyes are all big and round right now!! D: This is SUPERB. TERRIFIC. WONDROUS. At first ...

I need to read the other three chapters, this chapter is so good, I'm literally dying for more! Great job with the your punctuation (I have a serious thing with ...

I absolutely love this poem! I can totally relate to it, and I bet you if I showed this poem to some of my friends at school, they would nod ...

Nice job, this is a really cool story! I can kind of relate to Grey (strict parents who are nurses), which I like. Some of your punctuation for your dialogue ...

Wow, nice job! I like the line, "Like loosened threads upon a spool." I have a few friends who can actually relate to this poem, and I like when people ...

This is an interesting poem. I like how you described the process of making a pencil (I never knew how the factories made pencils up until now). The way you ...