Virgil

This is Yams here for a review! I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem. You were quite creative in your imagery. It made the poem's tone feel eeire or ...

This is Yams here for a review! Starting off this review is that you don't have any stanzas. You might not be familiar with the Publishing Center's formatting, but if ...

This is Yams here on Review Day! There isn't really a lot of variation in the punctuation in this poem which makes it kind of boring. You use a lot ...

This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! Melvin loved Claudia. He knew it right away. He bonded with her quickly over their similar struggles of failed musical ...

This is Yams here for a review again! Just a small note for the start that this chapter is in italics, though the other chapters aren't? Is this just a ...

Yams here for a review! First off, you use a lot of excess exclamation or question marks after you've used one like "?!?" or "!!" which took me out of ...

This is Yams here for a review on Review Day! The bus itself has a lingering iron smell, both inside and out, which can be attributed to the fact that ...

This is Yams here to review! I'm almost 99% certain that having the period at the end of each stanza is a stylistic choice. My question is, why did you ...

This is Yams here for a review! There are no stanzas in this poem so it would be nice if you chopped it up so we could see where you ...

This is Yams here for a review! I think you could mix it up with your punctuation instead of having it all the same. I don't know if you did ...

This is Yams here for a review! I think you could've tried to make it longer, at least. There's one stanza, and all of it is crossed out. I get ...

This is Yams here for a review! I'm going to go by stanza by stanza and say what I have to say about each one. You're my catastrophic obsession, You ...

This is Yams here for a review! I see humans, but no evidence of humanity. I'm leaving a suggestion here but I don't know if it'll help, but maybe change ...

This is Yams here for a review! There are no stanzas in this poem so it would be cool if you put them in to see where each stanza begins ...

This is Yams here for a review! There aren't any stanzas for this poem so I'd be cool if you chopped the poem up into stanzas so it's easier to ...