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Re: Moon Haiku
This is Kaos here for a quick review! So haikus generally are based off nature and I think that this is something interesting to base it off of. I really ...
Nov 27, 2016 -
Re: 439 words from page 244 of ma book
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I mentioned was the kind of excessive use of cutting off words and I didn't really like this. Only ...
Nov 27, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 2: Behind Closed Doors
This is Kaos here for a review! Jumping right into this chapter but I'll see what I can do. The start of the chapter is quite confusing and I wanted ...
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Re: Snippet
This is Kaos here for a review! You need to get a grammar checker. There are grammar and punctuation errors everywhere in this story but I'll cover a few. Commas ...
Nov 27, 2016 -
Re: 590 words from page 160 of ma book
This is Kaos here for a review! Something that I wanted to point out that I don't know if it has or not before is that this is an awkward ...
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Re: dayzed & confused & starving
This is Kaos here for a review! beyond daydreams of finding warmth in christmas-themed boxer briefs, nightmares consist of breaking their nose with two and a half punches and watching ...
Nov 27, 2016 -
Re: Metamorphosis
This is Kaos here for a review! The concept of the story could be made into something interesting, but that's not how I felt about this poem. So, you're telling ...
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Re: wings of glass
This is Kaos here for a review! when I gaze up at the night sky, I see dragons made of starlight gliding on wings of glass; i feel they could ...
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Re: Broken pieces
This is Kaos here for a review! So this was a poem that was wrapped up in itself in the sense that it doesn't explore any other poetic devices and ...
Nov 26, 2016 -
Re: Mummy?
This is Kaos here for a review! The structure of this poem was interesting, it felt like more of a sequence of letters than a poem to me in this ...
Nov 26, 2016 -
Re: I Am Here For You
This is Kaos here for a review! I thought that the poem set up a tone but didn't quite fully deliver on that. It's heartfelt in the sense that it's ...
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Re: Morrigan
This is Kaos here for a review! i. I am cold, and she is watching me. My veins flood with ice, each breath bringing frost into my lungs. She is ...
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Re: The Art of My Destruction
This is Kaos here for a review! The way that the words are worded is the thing that drew me to this poem, and is probably the strength of it. ...
Nov 26, 2016 -
Re: Emotions Evoked at the End of Fall
This is Kaos here for a review! The imagery is weird in the first stanza, but not really something that I would have thought of, it's in a new perspective. ...
Nov 26, 2016 -
Re: 1945
This is Kaos here for a review! I count the days before you come back to me. The light blue clock ticks, ticks, ticks, Measuring the distance between us in ...
Nov 26, 2016
