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Virgil

  • Poetry » Fantasy, General Re: Moon Haiku

    This is Kaos here for a quick review! So haikus generally are based off nature and I think that this is something interesting to base it off of. I really ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Dramatic Re: 439 words from page 244 of ma book

    This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I mentioned was the kind of excessive use of cutting off words and I didn't really like this. Only ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Dramatic Re: Chapter 2: Behind Closed Doors

    This is Kaos here for a review! Jumping right into this chapter but I'll see what I can do. The start of the chapter is quite confusing and I wanted ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Fantasy Re: Snippet

    This is Kaos here for a review! You need to get a grammar checker. There are grammar and punctuation errors everywhere in this story but I'll cover a few. Commas ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Dramatic Re: 590 words from page 160 of ma book

    This is Kaos here for a review! Something that I wanted to point out that I don't know if it has or not before is that this is an awkward ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: dayzed & confused & starving

    This is Kaos here for a review! beyond daydreams of finding warmth in christmas-themed boxer briefs, nightmares consist of breaking their nose with two and a half punches and watching ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Metamorphosis

    This is Kaos here for a review! The concept of the story could be made into something interesting, but that's not how I felt about this poem. So, you're telling ...

    Nov 27, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Fantasy Re: wings of glass

    This is Kaos here for a review! when I gaze up at the night sky, I see dragons made of starlight gliding on wings of glass; i feel they could ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Romantic Re: Broken pieces

    This is Kaos here for a review! So this was a poem that was wrapped up in itself in the sense that it doesn't explore any other poetic devices and ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Other » Narrative, Realistic Re: Mummy?

    This is Kaos here for a review! The structure of this poem was interesting, it felt like more of a sequence of letters than a poem to me in this ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Politics, General Re: I Am Here For You

    This is Kaos here for a review! I thought that the poem set up a tone but didn't quite fully deliver on that. It's heartfelt in the sense that it's ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Spiritual Re: Morrigan

    This is Kaos here for a review! i. I am cold, and she is watching me. My veins flood with ice, each breath bringing frost into my lungs. She is ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Realistic Re: The Art of My Destruction

    This is Kaos here for a review! The way that the words are worded is the thing that drew me to this poem, and is probably the strength of it. ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Emotions Evoked at the End of Fall

    This is Kaos here for a review! The imagery is weird in the first stanza, but not really something that I would have thought of, it's in a new perspective. ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: 1945

    This is Kaos here for a review! I count the days before you come back to me. The light blue clock ticks, ticks, ticks, Measuring the distance between us in ...

    Nov 26, 2016


The bird that would soar above the level plain of tradition and prejudice must have strong wings. It is a sad spectacle to see the weaklings bruised, exhausted, fluttering back to earth.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening