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Re: Them Blues
This is Kaos here for a review. I had a hard time collecting thoughts on this poem. It seems hastily written and angry, but not angry in the way of ...
Dec 2, 2016 -
Re: The Reason We Love
This is Kaos here for a review! There are more punctuation marks than just question marks. I know that this is something that seems intentional, but you need to cut ...
Dec 2, 2016 -
Re: Lover's Remorse
This is Kaos here for a review! This is an interesting poem I have to say and I think it kind of captured me, but the main problem with it ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Gods and Monsters: Chapter 1
This is Kaos here for a review! The voice in this first chapter is something that kind of stands out and I have to commend you on that though in ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Dwarf
This is Kaos here for a review! This is the weaker of the two poems that I'm reviewing right now with "The Sun" being a stronger piece than this. This ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Autumn (Why is it Hard to Fall?)
This is Kaos here for a review! The title is the thing that drew me to this poem and I kind of wanted to know the reasoning of why this ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: The Sun
This is Kaos here for a review! I didn't really get any benefit out of "You" being capitalized and it kind of distracted me from the rest of the poem. ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Supernovae
This is Kaos here for a review. There's a thing called subtly, you know. That's one of the big problems I had with this poem, which is that you spell ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Whisper
This is Kaos here for a review! I didn't really like the kind of listing format that this poem kind of had going on with the word and then like, ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Feedback Please
This is Kaos here for some notes. You can totally accomplish a book and I believe in you about that. This is an interesting set of characters. I'd say to ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Alice: Chapter-2
This is Kaos here for a review! Jumping right into this, the starting paragraph didn't really engage me with its metaphor and imagery that was provided. Give us something more ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Lying on the Forest Floor
This is Kaos here for a review! I have to commend you on the imagery in this poem as it was a real strength here. The thing I think that ...
Dec 1, 2016 -
Re: Kinetic Crusade Chapter 1 Glacier Burg
This is Kaos here for a review! The first thing that I noticed while reading through this is an amount of grammar errors. I suggest using a grammar checker to ...
Nov 30, 2016 -
Re: journey to oasis- aftershock#1
This is Kaos here for a review! Wowzers. The first thing that I noticed about this piece is the very large walls of text. I highly suggest you break these ...
Nov 30, 2016 -
Re: monday.
This is Kaos here for a review! So this was minimal and that was really my first thing that I noticed and had a problem with. I want more from ...
Nov 30, 2016