Twinkle4ever

I liked it all. you had a good flow with it. you started it well and then wrapped it all together with the perfect words. The font is a little ...

Coming to review more, She walked away to get me it --- should be ‘she walked away to get it’ I noticed it slightly drizzling --- ‘it was slightly drizzling’ ...

After 10 minutes spend in the washroom, I got out. --- should be ‘spent’ I thought that would come in handy and now, I have to remove it. --- remember ...

“Flo, darling! C'mon. We have to home!" --- ‘we have to go home’ I sat on my couch, with a cup of hot coffee on my hand. --- I think ...

Here to review again, “...I think if people out there were selfless then I would have been rescued...” I’m not sure what you were trying to say here. I think ...

That was so full of emotions, however small this poem is. I couldn't help but feel an ache inside my own heart. This is something that reminds us of the ...

This was a sweet little poem. It just needs a little more polishing. But it's quite romantic. I don't do poetry so I can't say much here except that I ...

I like your way of writing here. The words at the end of each line were simple and rhyming but because i was so totally engrossed it, they did not ...

I'm Here! Thanks for your review. And this is a really nice piece. There was a good flow to it and i really liked all the rhymes. :) Great job ...

Hey, thanks for your reviews and I am so glad you posted this finally. I was dying to know what was going to happen. If you ruin my chances of ...

This is a very good piece and to think you wrote this during school. Was it a class assignment or something? The descriptions here are short, simple and easy to ...

I’m here to review. Lucas lifted the woman up in his arms and disappeared into the forest set(comma) on returning to his home. From her hill she saw a wide ...

He understood but he was not about to nice. (not about to be nice) This time there was more action in the chapter. People were moving, time was passing quickly. ...

Okay that was tense. From the beginning till the end the serious mood was never drowned except for the part where Leon thought the Macumber guy looked like a bear. ...

Alright, onto the reviewing: Relieve flooded across everyone’s face. (should be relief) Its eyes were small things only distinguishable because of their oddly green colour. (Maybe you should write i