Start Life With A Style

Chooooooooooooooooooco!

This kind of poems are the one that I like the most!

Optimistic!

Brilliant!

With a beautiful rhythm!

Where you can see the writter hidding in between every line!

LOVELY! Great job, Choco<3333333333333333333333

And thanks for letting me know. I wouldn't change one single word.

~Sol Valeria

I'm Here! Thanks for your review. And this is a really nice piece. There was a good flow to it and i really liked all the rhymes. Great job on this one.
-Citizens running, kids screaming-- I don't understand this line. I mean is there some sort of crisis going on? Maybe they're all in a hurry. Yeah that must be it.

-and escape the work of stupid ol' buns-- I liked this line. It made me laugh. You have a very good concept here, one that should be applied throughout the world.

Do keep writing more!

Hey there!

So good job. You made me smile. That's quite a difficult task. Anyway, I absolutely hate rhyming poems, but enjoyed this. I'll admit, at first, this poem was getting on my nerves. Then, I progressed to

"Take no pressure anymore,
push it away and let it pour.
Start your way through a smile,
let’s start life with a style!"

and I began to like it. It kind of gave me a bit of a Jason-Mraz like feeling, like you should just let go, have fun, stop being so uptight. It's a lesson that many need to learn. (Especially me)

"Let your hair fly with the wind,
keep all your memories pinned.
Wave and hug all those loved ones,
and escape the work of stupid ol’ buns."

I loved this stanza, primarily because you used a common denominator: work/hair. I'm sure almost everyone can relate to feeling a bit stuffy in work outfits, and the analogy/meaning that came from this (to relax, let your troubles go sort of thing) was great.

In all honesty, this wasn't a deep, well-versed, extremely emotional poem, but I liked it nonetheless, and even if there were grammar/spelling mistakes, I didn't notice them.

To sum it all up - very cute, cheerful poem with a good meaning!

~Epic

It's my time to do a first review (yikes). I'm not too good at poems, but I'll try

Walking through the streets,
listening to nature’s beats.
Citizens running, kids screaming,
how come there’s never a day, beaming?

Well. I don't really know what to say about this stanza. I liked it, not yet any emotion. It builds up for something more emotional.

Take no pressure anymore,
push it away and let it pour.
Start your way through a smile,
let’s start life with a style!

Love what you're saying, cause it's true. Push away pressure, smile, and enjoy. Those are really golden rules. Love what you're pointing for.

Let your hair fly with the wind,
keep all your memories pinned.
Wave and hug all those loved ones,
and escape the work of stupid ol’ buns.

"Let your hair fly with the wind." Is that a metaphor for letting yourself just live? Loved this stanza anyways. Focus on what's positiove, and shove away the negative.

It’s another beautiful morning,
now, let’s work without another warning.
Just turn on the lights to see the world,
I promise there will never be a day gone swirled.

I have no words really, but I'll keep it with: I liked it.

Loved the poem, cause it reflects a very important viewpoint.

Keep on writing!

Love, Bob Walker!