- Re: There is a Bullet on my Bedside Table Oct 27, 2019
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Re: There is a Bullet on my Bedside Table
You have it spot on. It's about the struggle with suicidal ideation, and not trusting your own mind in those moments.
Oct 26, 2019 -
Re: That Single Flower
I really appreciate your feedback. The last story is about a sexual assault I experienced in my freshmen year of college. I would have liked to convey the pain I ...
May 15, 2016 -
Re: Broken Houses
Beautiful! The format is simple yet elegant. I absolutely loved it. Continue writing please! :)
Apr 22, 2015 -
Re: Soul Eater
Hello Jared! Thank you for the review! I have done some revising. Would you mind taking a look? I really would appreciate some feedback. :)
Apr 22, 2015 -
Re: Working Title: Withering
Hello! Wonderfully delicate piece! I enjoyed how each phrase expanded the picture, it corresponded well with the theme of aging, or the sadness that comes with it. The only critique ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: You Found Me
Beautiful! Absolutely loved it! :)
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Help
Hi, thank you for the review it helped a whole lot! I have edited the story now would you mind reading it? This is a true story, I guess its ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: The Way We Always Were
Hi! Thank you for the review, it helped when you(the reader) explained what you got from the poem. I have edited some parts to make them more understandable. Oh and ...
Jun 21, 2011 -
Re: Dear Mr. Rapist
Fantastically dark and emotional! I loved it! Keep writing. -Tory
Jun 20, 2011 -
Re: Offbeat Souls
Thank you so much for such positive feedback! I have always been nervous about putting my more abstract pieces online, I have actually a whole stack of these type of ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Straight And Narrow
Thanks for the review! :) I will definitely try what you guys are suggesting.
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: nothing friendly, nothing pleasant
Amazing. Writing about this subject is such a hard thing to do. But you faced it head on. You have courage and I admire that. This was very moving, keep ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: V.I.C.T.O.R.I.A.
I love this poem! My name is Victoria by the way. I like how it flows while still using each letter of your name to begin each sentence. :)
Mar 6, 2010 -
Re: Pebbles
The imagery of this poem was great! I loved the use of the ocean in this poem. :)
Mar 2, 2010
