ToSaferHarbours

Hi Starhunter! First I have to say that I love your avatar; Angel Beats is amazing :) And as for the story ... wow. It was a really, really great ...

Wow, very good story. It really drew me in and something about your dialogue and descriptions was just superb. I know you're still editing, but I just wanted to point ...

Hi Clarity! Safer here by request :) So I'm just going to say, rhyming poetry isn't really my thing, unless it's by Ralph Waldo Emerson or Lonfellow maybe xD So ...

Wow, very, very beautiful and provocative. Every stanza offered something new and it was just a joy to read, evoking so many emotions. "My veins are drained of those dreams..." ...

Not bad; you have talent and the potential to create some beautiful, emotional poetry. This would be good, but the problem is that the subject is old and tired. That ...

I really liked this poem. "She had sworn to watch over you..." So beautiful. This was just incredible. It makes me think of so many things. Wow.

Hi Klara! Safer here to review ;3 First of all, this is really beautiful. The piece has a beautiful, honest rawness to it. I liked where you say, "When is ...

Hey there! Safer here :D Wow. Just wow. That was incredible. It was such an interesting idea, and the story drew me right in. I think that remaining true to ...

I really liked this! This line though, "I would probably refrain from you and me too..." didn't really make sense to me? If you could maybe choose different words to ...

Cute story! You had some really nice descriptions :) There were a few grammar and punctuation errors, so I'll try to point out a few I noticed. ~ “'Auntie this ...

Really neat quote. It doesn't stand on it's own very well though ... don't you think it would be better in a story? :)

I really liked this ... but it should be in lines. It kind of looks like you meant to do that because of where the capitals are ... so maybe ...

I really loved this. Just not sure if it was supposed to be all lowercase? It had some really thought-provoking lines but the lack of capitals ruined it a little ...

I really, really loved this. It was so beautiful, kind of took me too another place ... Except for the capitalization errors and punctuation in odd places ... that ruined ...

Nice story! It had a great premise, but I think it would be better as a longer story or a even a novel. Everything happened too suddenly for it to ...