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Hi Klara! Safer here to review ;3

First of all, this is really beautiful. The piece has a beautiful, honest rawness to it. I liked where you say, "When is it that strangers stop being strange and start being familiar instead? You were never a stranger. Is it in a moment you give that look to each other; the moment when you secretly share your worlds for a second? They are not strangers, they are friends we’ve never met." Very profound.

There were a couple of punctuation errors and a couple of the sentences ran on too long without sufficient punctuation. for example, this sentence:

"It reminds me of that shattered streetlamp in front of your house where we used to spend our time at, as the bright light used to make your eyes shine blissfully you used to tell me how stupid I looked like when I giggled when all you were expecting from me was to tell you I love you too," is kind of confusing. You don't need to add that "at" - you could just say, "where we used to spend our time." And "how stupid I looked like" doesn't make sense; "how stupid I looked is fine That whole sentence is actually quite confusing, so it might be better to break it up.

In the next sentence:

"’Honey,’ you used to say ‘it’s pretty much obvious. It’s not like you are able to hide anything from me, so please stop looking away when I’m looking at you. You look really stupid.'’’ You need a comma after "say." And the narrator has already specified that he told her she looked stupid, so it looks weird to say it again in dialogue anyway. Maybe choose one or the other

I think you just need to practice a little on dialogue and punctuation. In "‘What the hell is wrong with you,’’ you shouted angrily ‘’ just say it! What’s wrong with you?!’" It should say, "‘’What the hell is wrong with you,’’ you shouted angrily. ‘ Just say it! What’s wrong with you?!’’’ Maybe like that. Otherwise you're fine. Once you work on that, it'll be great.

Anyway, it was really a great piece. I enjoyed it a lot. THe end was beautiful as well ...

"I have to let you go.

You used to tell me that you love me because I’m so simple. And yet simplicity is something you took away from me. This is where I’m going back to what I am. I’m going back to the moments of silence and the faces that are not strange. I’m going back to find the simplicity I’ve lost.

Where are you?

I let you go.

Gentle melodies are coming to my head and I know that this is all I ever dreamed of.

Where are you?

I open my eyes and someone smiles to me. I feel weird because not one question comes to my head. Not one doubt. I smile back.

I close my eyes. I let you go.
Are you here?

Don’t you see those yellow lights from across the sea we used to talk about so much? The reflection of the sky in the sea and sea in the sky still makes me feel so small. This is something I still half believe in.

You’re not here. I’m not leaving. I’m here and yet so gone away from you.

I let you go."

It reminded me of the last pieces of snow sliding down a window in the spring, reluctant to let go but forced to. Very good language usage.

Great job!