TheUnknownWriter

Hey, Unknown here for a review!*cough cough* It's been awhile since I've reviewed so pardon me if I'm a bit rusty. This is a wonderful poem, like Corgi said, it ...

Hello Potatoo!! XD Unknown here for a review! (Mind you that it's been a while since I reviewed so I might be a little rusty but a review nonetheless!) I'm ...

This sort of reminds me of the anime Blue Spring Ride- like mysteriouswriter said. I could totally picture this as a narration of the first episode of a shoujo anime! ...

Hello Pancake! Happy review day! This chapter seemed sort of short. As though it's like a filler chapter since not many things happened in this chapter. But that's okay, it's ...

Hey mintanchor! It's unknown here for a review! (Love your avvie by the way!) Overall, I think this is a great poem! The idea of a controlling father and the ...

Hello, and welcome to YWS! Although this genre is sort of cliche, this is a good start! So, as you said, this is only the first part of chapter one ...

Hello! aspiringauthor! Overall, your story has great potential. What I would suggest, is to include more imagery and details on the setting, characters, etc. And also some of the narrator's ...

Hey fellow Pinoy! :D I believe that this was a pretty good concept, but, like steampowered said, I agree that this essay wasn't really attention grabbing. Also, there are some ...

Hey Lewis! Kinda late but welcome to YWS! Overall, this was a great read! The use of figurative language and imagery was spot on. Like Dracula said, it was really ...

Okay time for that review I promised XD So overall, you greatly improved since the first chapter. It is a good length and not as much problems with the commas ...

Hey Guardian! UnknownWriter here for a review! The previous reviewers covered most of what had to be said but I really wanted to review yours :P Okay so right off ...

Hey! It's UnknownWriter for a review! This is a pretty good story start. You did good in introducing the story. But I think you could work on comma placement. I ...

Hey, Jay! That rhymes XD anyways, I'm here to review! I found this really funny and clever! I've never heard a song about fish before. But I agree with mountainclimber. ...

Hey, AshKitten! Unknown here for a review! I'm going to review as I read :) A few nitpicks: -it's* -'Alonyas mothers voice' Alonya's mother's voice* An alternative could be simply ...

Although this is a overused genre, it was a good start. Like what TheFlamingonator said, I agree that this was a cliche start but this sounded different than the rest ...