TheEstimableEelz

Solid. The subject matter is tired, but this successfully treats it as fresh and interesting. Free verse, though wonderful, isn't very surprising, and nowadays I see more of it than ...

Interesting poem. Suggestions in red, critiques in blue. I'm a young old wise fool stumbling in light line break here adds sense and sensibility who boldly shrinks yet fights yet ...

Intriguing. Looking at grammar and such first. These eyes don ' t judge. They only try to discover What you are or what you 're like. These ears only listen. ...

I like the concept here. The list format is okay - you make it better by the unlikely connectedness of the items within. The title has a nice alliteration and ...

Neat. Grammar and such first: Standing lonely, silent, on the dusty windowsill In tarnished silver, brilliant and white There is a candle... and wick faintly glowing The warm flame lines ...

Very cool poem! The grammar is off-kilter often, but that gives this poem its unique, worn/torn feel, as though the vagrancy has reduced the speaker's sanity. However, it is disconcerting ...

Nice. Even more so for one who doesn't dabble in the form frequently. Editing first: Limited are the capabilities of a person futile are our attempts to be anything more ...

Acrostics are fun! I wrote an acrostic sonnet once... although I mixed up the rhyme scheme between the two sonnet types. Edits first: Shriek and shrill within my heart, Omnipresent ...

Cool poem! To begin with, editing time: She ran hot water over her hand. The blue of her veins turned green Eelz says: I'd break this line here. to her ...

Amusing! I hardly get to read any rhyming poetry nowadays, and I must say that it can be delightful at times. The second-to-last line really wasn't long enough, I think. ...

Fun poem! I love these types of topics. The good for me (and probably all who read this) is the whimsical nature, the writing of a poem about a single ...

Interesting poem. The sound of it is pretty fun at the start of the first stanza and throughout the third, but semi-dark elsewhere (kinda like the reviews here are supposed ...

Neat poem. Fun to read, the pace is fast enough that a person don't stop to think about what he or she's reading, just get flashes of whatever cool image ...

Cool little poem. Like the concept, execution's pretty good. Normally, I love enjambment, but here it doesn't always seem to have a purpose; enjambment without a purpose seems silly if ...

Good poem! The first stanza drags a bit at the commas, and as such seems at odds with the rest; perhaps eliminate the first two and replace them with dashes. ...