Tenyo

Hey Jenthura! I love that the cultists were described as 'unruly neighbours', it sounds so quaint, considering they were causing earthquakes. I'm a little sad that they weren't actually people. ...

Hey Jenthura! 'Weird creepy blood magic.' I was kind of hoping this would be a nice hobbit hole, but that would have been too easy! If these adventurers have been ...

Hey Jenthura! I have to agree with Soundofmind that this feels a bit more like a journal entry. It might benefit from a few stylistic changes in order to make ...

Hey Mavisknightly! I think I understand the messages that this is trying to put across, but it did feel like it could have been done better. I found the mother ...

Hey Alliyah! Aw man, this is so good! I love the imagery, you've portrayed some really strong and impactful sentiments. The plastic flowers is one of my favourite lines. I ...

Hey Liberty! There's something beautifully solemn about this. Describing an infant in second person makes it feel a lot more intimate. I think it's partially because second person perspectives tend ...

Hey Sweetpea6skeen! I like the narration of this. It has quite a fairy tale quality to it that makes it nice to read. You include a fair amount of description ...

Hey Chase7! I love the beginning, where Chris gets cut off from his own internal monologue by smashing into a Cadillac. It really sets a president of how face paced ...

Hey Chase7! I found my way to this assuming it is the precursor to 'another casual day'? If not, then I apologise for digging up old work! I thought I'd ...

Hey Bloodyrose29! Forgive me, I'm going to have to reply in English because I know very little of Hindi. In terms of plot I think this is a really good ...

Hey AlanaT620 This is great! I was quite sceptical at first. These characters seem to have some pretty unhealthy relationships between them, it seemed like there's a lot of unnecessary ...

Hey LewisPencastle2! Your descriptions are fantastic. You use a broad range of vocabulary, and the specificity of the details create such a rich and vivid world. I'm really impressed. From ...

Hey issi01! Is this an opening chapter or a finished piece? It feels like there is a lot going on in the background that never really gets explained. Like why ...

Hey Nanda! I found this poem a little bit dry, to be honest. It feels like it is trying to convey a very powerful message, but it would have a ...

Hey Pretnetiouswriting! This is fantastic! It's so creative, I love the concept behind it, and the way it unfolds. Kassak is a great character. He seems quite sinister in the ...