Well written!
There's no clarity of the future and one shouldn't be stuck in the past, the only way we can escape from overthinking about them is to live today, which you brought out through this poem. I particularly liked the last stanza. It is quite optimistic mixed with hope.
One thing I felt that was out of place is that in the first stanza there's a sudden shift from describing the sufferings and unforeseen obstacles to a cheerful tone. I think in the following line you could change 'breathe' to 'breath'.
"Every breathe of yours, every moment you live"
Apart from this, I enjoyed reading the poem. Keep writing!
Best wishes,
I
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