TakeThatYouFiend

review, so I apologise if I am a bit rusty, but here goes! Firstly, I'd just like to point out a couple of fairly simple punctuation errors. I won't spend ...

Hello there! I'm afraid I'd like to start with quite a pernickety point, but first I'd like to say I'm glad you're writing rhyming poetry when most shy away! So ...

This was ridiculously beautiful and beautifully ridiculous! And, as has been mentioned below, your wordplay and rhythms can't are infallible. I have but one suggestion, and this Iis minor at ...

For a fresh start to poetry this is particularly good, and I'm glad you have decided to rhyme it, mainly because that allows me more opportunity for suggestions :-) Firstly ...

The scene you have painted here seems really quite depressing, not really what I imagined from the title. In fact, the work seems very much about the arduous work behind ...

This reminds me of a piece by a poet I like, called "No ball games etc." The message conveyed seems highly similar, although the structure is greatly different. This moves ...

To quote Benedict from Much Ado About Nothing, "There's a double meaning in that." :-) Firstly, your punctuation seems rather erratic. You vary wether you put a full stop at ...

Firstly, I must ask, why have you formatted it with the forward slashes? As I understand it they stand for a line break, but I don't see why you can't ...

Firstly, I'm a little surprised how you've publised this in the poetry category, when there is a lyrics category. But hey-ho. This was really good. Normally I get kinda annoyed ...

I'm really surprised there aren't more reviews on this already, but one thing's for certain this is a damn good rap. Firstly the spelling nit-picks I noticed. In the third ...

Velly nice Wizard, not as good as your teachers piece, but you can't write limericks all the time I suppose... Firstly, the most important thing to remember whilst writing scenery ...

O.k. this piece is great, (lyrics being my thing :-) ) so the review will mainly be small critique or ideas for you to play around with. Firstly, a couple ...

Firstly I must ask you, was the doctor who reference deliberate? And if so, methinks it should be a little more obvious. Secondly, the piece seems a little on the ...

Hello there, I am a big fan of lyric writing, so please bear in mind that is I seem overly critical I am merely over enthusiastic. The first verse appears ...

*high fives* Whoot! Another lyricist! (And if I'm not mistaken from the same lil'ol American town that broughtYWS such wonders as Brie and Sarai :-) ) My first point I ...