StupidSoup

Hi. I feel like at the end of this piece you start reaching for something to say rather than just cutting it. You start this poem in the format of ...

Hi. First off, on the second line of the second stanza you put "will" when it should probably be "would". Second off, I like the way this poem is structured ...

Hi. First thing I'd like to point out is that your poem doesn't really have a consistent flow to it. Your word choice seems almost random and therefore the stanzas ...

Hi. I like this poem a lot. The way you write is is very nice. The first verse flows really nicely and I personally really like the last sentence. However, ...

Hi. I really appreciate the mood and the message you convey. It's very subtle and you never say what you mean outright. I like the idea in general that talking ...

Hey. I'd like to believe that this has meaning but I cant see it. That would be ok, but it leaves me (and possibly others) confused and wanting more. I ...

First off there, I don't agree with your structure. I think this poem could be shortened in length simply by restructuring the stanzas. It goes beyond aesthetically pleasing to adding ...

I love this. Those are words I almost never say. Anyway, I love how short this is. It strikes the point your trying to make home. The poem is easy ...

There are a couple typos that really mess up the flow of the story. Especially the small amount of dialogue you have. I think your syntax (sentence structure could use ...

Congrats. You get have your poem torn apart by none other than me. Seriously though, my reviews are all based on zero sympathy. So first off, this is very good. ...

This is so far from terrible. This is such a visceral poem which I personally like. Although it does not flow (which I will get to later) I think the ...

Wow. A very nice character piece. Lets start out with some pros. You are a very skilled writer. This short story flows so easily and effortlessly connects with reality. I ...

I really like this story. I think its crafted really well. Your pacing is really crisp and though some may call it a bit fast I think its perfect for ...

Random digits here for another review! Hooray for grinding review points! (am kidding) Anyway, onwards 1: Whats his due? 2: his bones? How about in the stale air or he ...

Heyo, random digits here with a review. First, Some nitpicks: 1: socked feet? You could use this but in this case I think just feet would be fine. (P.S: Comma ...