StoryWeaver13

This is very...short. We don't get to know a lot about your character or the plot, which is a little disappointing, and I really just think that it will come ...

This is decent, but there are definitely some kinks that need to be worked out as well. I feel as though this story is very much telling, rather than showing, ...

Whoa....I love this. It's bitter and almost heart-wrenching, really. You have a lot of brilliant lines, such as "you took out your cell phone and started bleeping out contacts, cutting ...

My love of animals and rainy days made the entire ambiance of this story easy to fall in love with. It was short and sweet, written well, and with a ...

I really like the idea of this, and some of the lines are purely brilliant, but they're globbed in with other lines that have poor grammar, confusing structure, and too ...

You have a beautiful style that almost causes the words to crescendo and diminuendo like music. I have issues with the ever-changing rhyme scheme, though. It makes it too disjointed, ...

I personally felt like the rhyme was very stilted and awkward - and led to some lines that weren't bad but failed to conjure much emotion. You had too many ...

I like this...it's a compelling hook even if it is lacking in detail or direction (I can honestly say that I have no clue what direction this story will take). ...

I find it funny that you mentioned reading it aloud at the end of this, because by the second stanza I was like, "This would really sound great if someone ...

IRI really got to the heart of what needs fixed, so sorry if I repeat anything she already said (and I'm sure that I will). For me, grammar and punctuation ...

This isn't my kind of poetry, I find it short and listy and I never really *feel* anything from it emotionally (which is kind of a poem's point). You clearly ...

I love this. It has kind of a wonky rhyme scheme that's there sometimes and not others, but it has spunk - I like spunk. Being a girl and never ...

This was written really well! I have to admit that I kind of stumbled on the first stanza because the way it was worded tripped me up a little, but ...

You describe things so well - the sea, the shells, the people - in a way that interconnects each thing to the next. I'm not a religious person so religious-y ...

Well my first complaint was going to be that it wasn't in stanzas, but I saw that it was a glitchy thing so I won't pick on you! ^_^ Well, ...