A/N: A poem that I wrote for my summer program, where the ArtWell organization had assigned me to write one (or a few). I read it today publicly and wanted to share it with you all, my fellow writers. It has been formatted differently than how I had written it, so some pointers, if needed, would be lovely. Feedback is so greatly appreciated! (: Thank you for reading!
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This poem flowed so well. I like it a lot! Keep writing! ^_^
Thank you for the feedback!
This seemed like a carefully written poem. I love every detail that you put into it, and every thought that you spoke about. All the ideas connected with me, like someone was telling me my world's injustice & errors, innocence & dreams. It seems as if I can hear you speaking as I read. No matter how many times I read it, different thoughts always linger in my mind. I can't get enough of it! I hope you keep writing. It was an outstanding poem ^_^
Thank you! This makes me a bit more confident, since you hit on the hammer on what I was trying to do. Haha. XD Again, thank you for the feedback, it is greatly appreciated.
I find it funny that you mentioned reading it aloud at the end of this, because by the second stanza I was like, "This would really sound great if someone was speaking it!" There's just a speakability about it, which is always good. It flows very well and has a really strong energy to it. I wish I could think of more to say...but really, this is a stellar poem.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver
Aha, thank you so much for the feedback! I was hoping to be able to structure it so that it could be spoken, so this is a huge compliment for me.
I liked this poem, it really spoke to me. It was just so REAL, like a fountain of hopes and truth, worries and dreams. It's one of those poems that you can read over and over again and still be hit with the message.
Anyway, format, structure, and conventions wise it's all good. And everything creativity wise.
So overall, a very good piece.
My rating: 5*s
My favourite part: Aaaall of it
Keep writing!
w&w
Thank you! This warms me like you wouldn't believe. I'm happy that I was able to get my message across to you. It was rather scattered, after all. Thank you again for giving me some feedback, I appreciate it greatly.
~IRI