Above it All

Hey there, TazmaniaGirl to review!

I review things differently to others.
Okay, so...

Positives -
Great describing words! I loved the way you put ' Imblued' in there.
It's a word that I actually haven't come across, but, I love it all the same. I'm not quite sure what it means, but I might put it into my work!
I also like the way you've set this out.
A mix of words, all into a poem.

Negatives -
Punctuation.
Things like capital letters, full stops ect.

OVERALL-
Well Done, and I would love to read more!
xx

~ TazmaniaGirl xx

Greetings!

So, I want to start off that this is poem is just, oh gosh. Really good! I like how you put together a poem where the words were so mysterious and so vague, and it really makes me think about how the title and the content go hand in hand. It's something that I had to think about for some minutes, really thinking. That's something that I haven't really done in a while now.

I just wanted to to point out how I like your style here, the way that this poem started really delicately with 'soft' words; lines that are like scattered thoughts but yet still relate, since there's no punctuation; great vocabulary to really try to place an image in my mind, and unexpectedly ended powerfully. It's a rather common line that I've seen, but when taking what you've built up before reaching the end and completing it really well. Though it does seem a bit out of place, it's a very powerful sensation.

It's short, but straight to the point yet really has your mind thinking to really get a point on what the poem's trying to present to the imagination. Reading it aloud really has taking considerable pauses and makes the flow of the poem quite fluid and graceful.

Great job. Your presentation of the poem was really well done! I had to admit, I usually really hate poems that don't use punctuation, but yours doesn't really need it. It stands perfectly fine on its own. Very powerful poem. This was lovely, and while this is one of the first poems that you've posted here, I can see that you've had some experience and perhaps something more that we all would love to see being released and written through your writing. I hope to be able to see more from you in the meantime!

Welcome to YWS. You've warm wishes and sincere words.
~IRI

This isn't my kind of poetry, I find it short and listy and I never really *feel* anything from it emotionally (which is kind of a poem's point). You clearly have a beautiful vocabulary, but I would've liked to see it really go deeper.

Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

Hi,

Well first of I thought this was an excellent poem that has no need to be long but in its right is amazing. Your great vocab really complimented the poem and it really illustrated your point so I could see where your poem was coming from.

Also welcome to YWS, I know it is hard to write one of your first pieces and I think you have done an excellent job presenting the poem.


elevated

alive

breathing in

imbued with love

wrapped in a sheet of grace

soaring

unabashed 

passion overflowing

life knows not my power


Thank you I enjoyed your poem with all my heart and hope to see more.

CM