SpiritedWolfe

Hello there! Interesting prospect you have here, with quite the snarky pokemon you've given us at the narrator. I'll start off by mentioning, I don't think you use enough pronouns, ...

Hello again. Alright, so there's a bit more emotion here, which is good! A step in the right direction. Really, this and the last part should just be merged together. ...

Hello there. I see that this quite the tiny passage you have here, which makes it pretty difficult to review, but I'll try my best to go into depth. (I ...

Final part before I'm all caught up, I'm so excited! (Now, let's hope you don't wait a year to post again...) Hey there, Dark Raven! Alright, now I'm starting to ...

Hey, Dark Raven! Another really creepy chapter you have here, watching it all relapse. Now, I'll tell you now that this will be a short review since I have very, ...

Hey, Dark Raven! I'll just jump right into the notes - ...them; a Crips in rapper style clothes, against the wall, pinning him there. There are two things wrong with ...

Hey, Dark Raven! Alright, so, I see Mindy is thinking about God again. But its interesting that this time she sees Big Daddy in his actual superhero suit, cape and ...

Hello there, Dark Raven! This relapse of Mindy is actually pretty unnerving. She's suddenly gone from being that sweet little, actually innocent, girl to this girl with a monstrous rage. ...

Hey, Dark Raven! Yeah, I know I've already reviewed this, but now that I've gone through the entire previous 12 chapters, I feel better qualified to review it. One thing ...

Hey, Dark Raven! So this is the last part until I get to the part where I first read. I'll warn you know, I'll go back and re-review those, just ...

Hey, Dark Raven! I'm going to start with the ending, so the last paragraph, since its so fresh in my mind. The last couple sentences specifically. In those last three, ...

Hey, Dark Raven! To start this off, in the very beginning I was a little confused. It seems like there was some kind of format similar to a diary entry, ...

Hey, wwho! Welcome to YWS! To start this off, it seems like your dialogue really needs some work. I'll drop this right here for you to take a look at ...

Hello, Akan! Welcome to YWS. I hope you enjoy yourself here! Alright, to start this off, the beginning doesn't really pull me in, and I'll tell you the same thing ...

Hey there! Welcome to the fantastic world of YWS ~ Hope you enjoy yourself here. I'm Wolfare, and I take the pleasure of being your first reviewer. You have an ...