Seastormy

This is very nicely worded and I like it a lot. I must say, I'm in love with the line, "Is it when the disease is in every phrase?" Just ...

Very nicely done. You obviously have a decent amount of skill in writing, though the piece doesn't seem to flow in the way I expected an essay like this to. ...

Firstly, I must say that I didn't find the title very flattering for this piece. I was surprised to see how unique this poem was after reading the title ^^; ...

I loved the rhythm and tone of this poem immensely. Oddly, I prefer writings like these. The description said it was "your life the past 8 months," and if it ...

I glanced over the original chapter you did, and it looks like you cleaned it up well with this edit. ^^ It kept my interest and I really want to ...

I get the message you're trying to send and I like it a lot. The whole poem seemed to have a disappointed and disgusted tone, up until the last paragraph ...

This was certaintly a fun poem. "Zeroes seemed to mock at him" sounds very odd to me. Try "Zeroes seemed to mock him" instead, maybe? Also, in the fifth stanza, ...

I liked this poem so much, you have no idea. That first line you wrote was brilliant, nicely done. I just love your wording and the emotion I get from ...

I agree with CaptainFinick, your descriptions are weak. In the first paragraph, for example, you might want to go back and describe the setting she's in a little more. You ...

I like this so much. I like the writing style you used. In the third sentence, 'commenting' should be 'commented' because you said 'insulted' rather than 'they were insulting'. In ...

Don't take this the wrong way, but the spelling in this piece is atrocious. Most programs nowadays should have an automatic spell check. If you're unsure of a word, you ...

Very well written, but the end seems kind of rushed to me. Maybe you could have elaborated more on how the drug influenced her. Instead of only listing the visuals, ...

I peronally like the fact that you don't elaborate on who the poem is about. I don't really understand why the speaker seems "unworthy of priority", however. Very nice poem ...