Just an idea on a lazy Sunday, for a younger audience. At least it rhymes.
There was once a boy named Spence,
To him, math never made sense;
Whenever he gave it a try,
Numbers swam before his eyes.
Zeroes seemed to mock at him,
And measurements seemed so grim,
Large numbers made him feel dazed,
Long decimals left him crazed.
Once, Teacher called him to the front,
A student said, very blunt,
"Don't ask ole Spence any sum,
Mathematics leaves him glum."
He was sent out in the hall,
As Teacher stood, and stood tall,
"The brightest kid in the class,
Lisa, you'll help Spence in Maths."
Now, Lisa was smart and kind,
As Spence would very soon find;
Oh, she never called him names,
And showed him such fun math games.
It took time, but soon enough,
Spence no longer thought math tough;
Test week came, and all the fuss
Had left him with an A+!
Overjoyed, Spence knew right then,
Hard work pays off in the end,
And as Lisa showed that lad,
Doing math can be so rad.
So, kids, don't ever give in,
Not when your patience wears thin,
Not when classmates offer taunts,
Zoom ahead and prove them wrong.
Oh, how I love a poem with a message. I say this would be a great poem to offer a child (or adult) having trouble with really any problems in life that require studying/work.
I find it lacks a cohesive rhythm as some lines have and others don't. I'm not sure if you were intending rhythm at all, but it's just a note. (I've a fancy for lyrical texts)
"He was sent out in the hall," seems wordy to me. I'd think "he was sent out [to] the hall."
I really do appreciate this poem -- thank you for it.
- mShujin
This was certaintly a fun poem.
"Zeroes seemed to mock at him" sounds very odd to me. Try "Zeroes seemed to mock him" instead, maybe?
Also, in the fifth stanza, I think those last two lines would sound better if you switched the order. Something like "She showed him such fun math games, and never called him names." My personal opinion, of course. ^^;
Everything else seems fine to me. I like the rhyme scheme you have going on and spelling/grammar is on par.