Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Watch out there,s a car Emily screamed!, derrick swerved to the right and then they slammed in to a tree. She could hear the mettle scrapping the tree then I blacked out. When I walk up the I herd Emily..,Emily !! I was on a hospital bed, I looked to my right and I saw Derrick he was not looking at anything it looked like he was not even hear in a way. Then the nerce stared pushing me again down the hall she brought me to a room and then left befor I could asked her any questions. I had a I've in my arm giving me medduson, I Felt so drowsy, soon after I past out.
Hmm, well, this was an interesting piece here. Its a bit hard to see exactly what this is meant to be, but it does read a bit like perhaps a first paragraph or a prologue right here...with the style of what we've got going on here, although the fact that the whole matter takes place within a flashback does bring into question whether its a prologue, cause usually you don't get flashbacks inside the prologue itself. At any rate, this is a solid little piece here, its got a couple of issues here and there spelling wise, I usually don't point these out but here, they were quite numerous and there were enough of them to make it a bit harder to understand the story so I thought I'd mention them. That needs a little bit of a look at there.
That aside, we get a perspective of someone in what appears to be a fairly serious car crash there just hearing the sounds of impact and then waking up in a hospital. It is quite fast paced and I like that, it conveys the feeling of a high speed crash there and you can sort of imagine the shock the characters must've felt there. It was pretty nicely done.
All in all a solid piece that you've got right here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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