Sassykat

Wow, you're good at this. I think I'll follow you now....*clicks follow.* Critiquing! If you looked inside a girl you would see how much she really cries, You would find ...

an d I become the (pssst...there's only one center to the world) center of this world A maz ing job. Very excellent. You caught the emotion impeccably. My only critiques ...

How sweet. Now, critiques! I would tell you today, here I added a backspace before the comma and a return T hat you're the one that fills my life, same ...

Critiques first: I've got stresses up to here, Constant whispers in my ear Keep my grades high, keep tension low, With nowhere to turn but places to go. Smile, frown, ...

*gasp1!!!11* savvy, I know just how you feel. I almost started crying, too.OH this was sweet!!! Why, oh, why can't I like something more than once? Oh, well, I'll just ...

Aww, how sweet. I'm thinking, since you did use some punctuation, that you might add the right capitalization. Also, there were some spots that seemed a little unclear: as i ...

Was that it? I think the reason there is nothing to critique is because there is almost nothing there to begin with. You have a good start, here, but it ...

Oaaaaawwweeeehalallallentalwla325a 3523j;51iuawefj This was amazing-sauce!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I must admit, it was like an amazing book I couldn't put down. Ever word was suspensful, except for the last one

This was nice. It had meaning to it: you took what would normally be a cliche and made it new and fresh, and beautiful! Just one thing, I think that ...

Ooooh, this was so an amazingly good way! I loved it! If I we were allowed to push the "like" button more than once, I would push it about seven ...

Okay. I can see this being great. Just a few critiques: You need to work on your punctuation. Add commas, or even periods in some places. "Bare" in the fifth ...

Awesome. I heard about that guy, and I wonder what happened to his reputation when he was wrong not once, but twice ...Anyway, loved it! I sit silently watching the ...

Liked it! There was a lot of...ooh, what's the word?.. haughtiness , or maybe aloofness in there, or maybe even quite a bit of I told you so. Plenty of ...

Whhoooooaaaahhhh. I can totally feel your frustration. This was incredibly creative! I loved it! I think viscous is an unbelievably perfect word for it. Heehee. I think the only critique-y ...

yes, I believe this was as cliche as you feared, but you pulled it off! It was sweet! I can only say you can clean it up just a little ...