Sassykat

This was my favorite chapter so far! I only have one little thing to point out, and it's the end. I don't know, it just seemed really abrupt. I think ...

I tried writing a couple sonnets, but I fear I will never match up to this one. Wow, it almost made me cry. But thanks to DrElefant teaching me how ...

Never again will you ever believe, never again will you ever decieve. It's "E, I" since there's a C. Masked by your hate and devilness inside, There's no such word ...

Just to start out with, critique-wise, I just want to say that I was scared of this poem when I first looked at it, and others will be too if ...

I beg to differ, inkwell. I think the comma at the beginning just looks and sounds like a typo. It's distracting and holds no meaning to me. Also, at the ...

Hmm. tgirly got all the ones I noticed except one: your rhyming patter error. They are living in relentless freight, Because of your rhyming pattern, and because it will make ...

Great job. A few very general nitpicks, since I'm feeling to lazy to go into detail: -Watch your grammar (mostly capitalization, especially capitalize at the beginning of each line, whether ...

Awww, how sweet! Now, I didn't see anything in particular that a good read-through on your part won't fix. Typos and all that. I'm feeling lazy so I won't nitpick ...

Like LittleLionWomen said, Great job. I loved it. I just have one little critique for you: Watch your punctuation. You have it in some places and not in others. I ...

Ooh. Shivery. I have a few critiques for you. The tears fall from my face, I ’ve fallen from grace. Typically when writing a poem you capitalize the first letter ...

Ah, I liked this. It was relate-able. This is just my opinion, it's fine the way it is, but perhaps add more detail? Why are they feeling like this? All ...

*Gasp* you did such an amazing job with this that I could feel the suffocation of the narrator! I actually stopped breathing during each of those stanzas where you had ...

I've opened the rusty door to my heart Time and time again for you comma, Letting my guard down comma, Believing you had changed. But love, you're still a liar ...

Well, um, it was sweet. I don't know if you already realized this, but it needs a lot more. One haiku stanza isn't enough to pull of an idea like ...

This was nice. It was very descriptive. All I can say, critique-wise, is that some of the rhymes were pretty forced: [quote]They work together To share the load Of the ...