Rydia

Howdy! So I've not read the previous parts and if I mention anything which you think you've already covered, be sure to take my advice with a grain of salt! ...

Hey there :) Specifics 1. I think the first three lines are very prosaic and would benefit from losing a few words here and there and general tightening of the ...

Hi there, thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. First off, I like the title as it's sweet, tells us a little bit about the poem but doesn't ...

Hello! I'm cruising the poetry forums today so watch out ;) Specifics 1. I think there are a few places where your word choice could be stronger for example, instead ...

Hi! Thought I'd take a look at this :) Specifics 1. like the pearls of dew drops A few words could be taken out here to tighten the flow up ...

Haaiiii! Poetry! Specifics 1. Good title - it's a strong, clear statement and its got some intrigue. 2. I think the first and second line are strong but the next ...

Hi! I've not read the previous chapters but it's about time this got a review! :) Specifics 1. In Fact, I felt like I was sitting on something—a chair, maybe—and ...

Hi there! Specifics 1. I've not read any of the previous chapters so it might be that people who have would know immediately who the first sentence refers to but ...

Hey there, thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. He hadn't eaten in two weeks, and even though he had a lot more energy now due to the ...

Hey there, welcome to the site! I'm going to give some comments as I read through first and then try to summarise my thoughts at the end. Specifics 1. In ...

Hi again :) Specifics 1. I think this would be a good chapter to begin with description to set the scene - who's in the room, what's it look like ...

Hi Remembrance! I'm not going to give a typical review on this because I think with personal pieces, they have to come from the heart and that rawness is part ...

Hey, thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. So the title is also the first line of the poem? I think you need to write that line out ...

I'm having trouble sleeping so I guess you can have a morning review instead of an evening one :) Specifics 1. Aidan landed neatly on a square of rock beside ...

Looks like you have a couple of chapters I haven't read yet ;) Specifics 1. It felt like someone had toppled the world over its axis, as if the sights ...