Hey there Mem. May I call you Mem?
Anyways it's just lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.
So I'm not quite sure how to review this because this is a more emotional and personal piece. I'm a bit afraid of messing this up in some way but everything needs two reviews, so I guess I'll try my best.
Overall I really liked the story because it was so emotional and somewhat heartbreaking. I mean that sounds like a really bad reason to like your story but I liked the narrative of everything. And also how it didn't really go in chronological order because it seemed like you were jumping between important thoughts.
^Does any of that make sense? I really hope so.
One thing I should say something about but I'm not sure if it's a style choice or not. There are zero apostrophes in any of the contractions. At first I figured it was just a couple of typos but by the time I got down to the 10th time, I started to think it was just a style choice. So if you could just clear that up for me, that would be great.
Tributes are always nice to read, no matter who the story is being made out to. I recently lost my grandfather to cancer so I can understand what it's like. So sorry for your loss and I hope you are doing better. It's bad that so many people can relate to this certain event but that's the way life goes.
Well I guess that's really about all I have for this collection of comments. Hopefully this will prove helpful to you or at least make you feel better about your piece.
Have a nice day.
Happy RevMo.
Lizzy
The Queen of the Book Clubs
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