Rydia

I like this poem though your rhythm jumped around a lot and it could have had more description. The ending is very nice though and generally it's well written. Do ...

Again this is good and I haven't seen the film or book or whatever it's based on but it's interesting. I can see this being a sort of 'buffy the ...

I like this story. It's well written and you give the reader just enough pieces of information to keep them curious but not enough to bore them. Here are my ...

Very nice. Yes, always a good idea if you're finding writing difficult, just write a poem on not being able to write a poem. Lol. I like this and in ...

There's some nice imagery in this piece and I'm guessing it's poetic prose rather than poetry? Hmmm. This site probably needs an official place for poetic prose with the amount ...

After that rather thorough critique what is there left for me to say? Lol. I liked this chapter and you've introduce the character Edna well and a good cliff-hanger there ...

Again I didn't really like the format of this poem. When dealing with powerful emotions, you need to convey them through imagery and other poetic techniques. Also, this line made ...

Okay, first impression is that it's a nice poem but regular rhyme and irregular rhythm is rather strange. On the eighth line I think you mean gone numb rather than ...

The first thing this piece needs is more description. You use phrases such as 'she eventually fell down' while barely mentioning the struggle. We want to see how hard this ...

This story was good but you should build up the tension more and add a little more description. Maybe describe the scenery that your character's running past. A nice piece ...

I love the storyline and I'm already feeling really sorry for Jamie, she seems to have a very hard life. This piece was well written with some good description and ...

Hey there and welcome! This piece is full of raw emotions and it's very well written. The one thing I would say is that it's not the most unique of ...

Okay, just going to pick out the spelling mistakes and miswordings but I suggest you read through and check your punctuation too. I always seem to miss those mistakes. Hope ...

I've avoided this piece some time as I have not read 'The taming of the shrew' but I thought I'd have a look... I found this rather humouress and it ...

This isn't quite in the format of a poem but it's got some really vivid description so I think I'm right in saying it's poetic prose. Even so I think ...