I appreciate the criticism, and haven't been on the site in a while, so my styles changed a lot. But, Sohini, you seem like a traditionalist. This poem was never meant to have structure- it adds to the symbolsim. And sometimes I just prefer free-verse.
The point about the exclamation mark. No it's where it is for a reason. It's not 'just eternal nothingness'...it's just 'just'. It's making a point that there it nothing really to it, nothing particular, then it goes on to the description.
The meaning of the poem isn't about the exam hall itself, it's about the feeling of entrapment, suspense and confusement. I have trouble in exams, and often go into my head a lot- mentally I get torn apart.
I think there is depth to those words/phrases. The impact might make that unclear, but it's more description in those lines than an explanation. The choked snowflakes refer to the vast amoutns of dust that seemed to linger in the air.
I'll happily agree the ending is unclear. I was trying to show the idea of realisation- knowing that whether you;re in your head or not, you;re still sitting there in an exam hall balancing your entire future on a score out of whatever.
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