Rosan

There is an error in the third stanza. That's all and good job.

Keep Writing, I would like to see more of your work.

I'm not that good with criticizing so I'll just say what I think. I'm not sure how to say this but it seemed like a paragraph that was cut into ...

Wow, this is great! Love it. Sorry though, there's nothing else I can say.

I will pinpoint the last part/ sentence: "Standing in the middle of the forest, hidden beneath the bushes and branches of the trees was Charles, lying beside a teenage girl, ...

I like it!

Sad...

First of all Welcome to YWS. I would like to point out the the capitalization of several letters and the punctuation marks found in each line. This is a good ...

So sad... I hope I could write like that too...

I kind of remembered the song "Wake me up when September Ends" when I saw the title, anyway, it has been a long time since someone last commented, about seven ...

Pretty emotional

Wow.

And after four years, I'm the next one who will comment. I've got to say, it's pretty cool.

What does all this mean?

Though it was good