Riedawriter23

Very nice, the ending was my favorite and I was interested the whole time! Now to critique: 1. This would look and maybe even flow much better if your format ...

Hmm, this was very nice and refreshing. Excellent description, you didn't over or under do it. Sometimes though, I heard the same word many times in a row. It wasn't ...

I love this. Short, meaningful, AND interesting. I love your analogies and your description is excellent. I was just reading your sentences over and over, they had so much meaning ...

I think this is wonderful. It shows a lot of characteristics from other stories you write and well, we all know that I love those. Everyone else pointed out the ...

XD this is one crazy man you've created Brad! But of course interesting and I love it. What I loved the most was that, as you were going into the ...

I just love this story! Everything is so different and unexpected. I hope Tea didn't die! The brother/sister love thing was really cool it would be sad if it ended ...

This was an overall good intention but...the ending made it sort of tacky. Ofour has already mentioned your spelling so I won't. There's actually a spellcheck before you post so ...

XD Clau you crazy woman! ..... What were you thinking?! ..... It was kinda hot actually. Kyle, pregnant? Woo! And you made Jon sound so wonderful and unsupportive in a ...

Awww, this was so cute. I LOVE the Kyle/Jon thing and this was also made me extremely hungry but I'll get over it. lol They are just the cutest friends ...

Ah this was scary! I didn't expect it to be scary but it was! Poor Jon, he's not going to die is he?! You did wonderful on description! I loved ...

Kyle and Ariel?! Omg that REALLY caught me off guard. Somehow I think that I shouldn't be reading this until I finish Ch. but of course I'll read it anyways ...

Hehe, this was hilarious! I love her perspective and... just her life is interesting. This wasn't much and even in the little that I read I was laughing and interested ...

Ah, wonderful ending! And I love how this felt like action but was really after the action. I don't have much to really critique except maybe check for capitals after ...

Okay, now I know who these people are, it makes more sense since I read #2 first. And I love this story, it's so different. I don't think I've ever ...

Whoa, I've never read the first and looks like I'll have to, this is really good! :) I only noticed that some sentence structure was missing words and I didn't ...