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Re: The Silver Ribbon
Hello dove. Well done. This is a very whimsical piece. I love how simple and vague it sounds at first, but if you read it again, you see underlying meaning ...
Dec 22, 2012 -
Re: Suicide
Hey doll! This is a really good piece, and what makes it so great is the different points of view. Whenever I read a work about suicide, it is always ...
Dec 17, 2012 -
Re: Saying Goodbye
To put it simply, this is short, sweet, and to the point (no pun intended). I really like how you focus on moving forward from cutting. You have a reason ...
Oct 18, 2012 -
Re: The Final Battle
Hey Max! First of all I must say your vocabulary is very good. Good vocabulary says a lot about a writer. One thing you need to work on however is ...
Oct 14, 2012 -
Re: I love a weeping angel
Hello dove! Wow. Just give me a minute here to process this. That is absolutely beautiful. Your imagery is suberb. Your word choice is wonderful. When it comes to any ...
Oct 10, 2012 -
Re: The Final Arc.
Hey there. I liked it. I really thought it was clever how you didn't give the characters names. It helped to make the story a little anonymous. As far as ...
Sep 11, 2012 -
Re: Second Best
Morning dove! Good job. I think that you were able to get across the message very well, the extreme competition of being a dancer. However, I think that the peom ...
Sep 11, 2012 -
Re: Requests Upon Death
Oh, wow. This is breathtaking. I'm at a loss for words. I love the way the words flow while you read. The piece is so whimsical. It's sad, without being ...
Sep 10, 2012 -
Re: The Pain In His Eyes
Hey there dove, Good job. I really like the dark undertones of the poem. There are many different pieces out in the world from the hurting person's perspective, and I ...
Sep 10, 2012 -
Re: Identity thief
Hey there dove, So I really like this. I think it has potential to become more then a short story. This brief section would make a good prologue. Where as ...
Sep 10, 2012 -
Re: Like an eagle
Hey zoehuman! One of the most important concepts of writing is imagery, using words to paint a picture in the mind of another. I absolutly loved the imagery in this ...
Sep 6, 2012 -
Re: Just Until February
This is really good. I really like how you played the story out in the end, with Harry having Ingrid tell him about her life. It was touching and emotional ...
Sep 6, 2012 -
Re: Childhood Memories
Your poem is great. It has the essence of being a dream, a bittersweet remembrance. Although the poem appears to be sweet, it has underlying tones of sadness and regret. ...
Mar 27, 2012 -
Re: Rose
Well done! Although it was a a very classic plot line, your story was very oringinal. You need to be careful of grammatical errors. There were several times that I ...
Jan 1, 2012 -
Re: My Christmas Miracle
Well done. What I loved most about your poem was the fact that you do not know what happened to his love. There is a level of mystery to it ...
Dec 26, 2011
