Raindeer

Hi, again. So. Short chapters. Again. Please make the next ones longer. Longer and more detail and imagery, the better. Okay, this part of the review is for chapter 2. ...

Hello there!! I'm going to start with things I thought could've been improved. 1) Kinda info-dumpy. It was all, I'm a daughter of blah blah , info info info info. ...

Hi, there. I'm going to do this review a couple lines at a time. Okay! We shall begin. HOLLY EFFECT Holly , Holy A song I heard, With chorus' ringing, ...

Hi, there. So - interesting story concept here. The whole idea is quite nice and I like the storyline already. However, it is a little scattered and all over the ...

Hi. Ohhh, this is interesting. It's almost a poem, but in journal/short story form. It's very interesting, but had room for improvement. There are quite a few errors in here ...

Hi, there. Wow. So, without repeating anything yizhongt said, I'm afraid I can't offer much criticism. It's a magnificent start to a story. You should really continue it! Really, all ...

Hi, there! So, this was a humorous but historical read, which always makes a piece interesting. So kudos to you for that. Yet, there are many things you could improve ...

Hi, there. I'm going to start this review off with some suggestions, then things I liked. Okay! The first thing: description. Here is a paragraph from your writing; Heping was ...

Hi... I'm just here for a super quick review. Okay- I'm going to focus on the presentation mostly, and format. BUT, not stanzas. So Don't worry... I noticed the reviewers ...

Hi, hello. So my first impression on this was that is was a little short... But I guess I feel like this could use another part or two. Or maybe ...

:O Wow! such a lovely piece. Honestly, I don't have much criticism to offer, besides a couple tweaks to a few of your lines. Thy hatred would bear the venom ...

Hi, hello there. Like the reviewer below me, this almost reminded me of some sort of fairytale/fable the way you laid it out. It's a nice little piece, however, there ...

Hi there! Wow, fantasy poem! Love it. The only criticism I have to offer isn't really criticism, more like nitpicks... So we shall start! One ruled of face. But quickly, ...

Hello, EternalRain here for a quick review. So this is beautifully written out, and I admire this writing very much. However, it's not quote 'poetry' to me. Almost like a ...

Hi, there. So, I'm going to base this review on two simple points. The first one is breaking up your paragraphs. Dialogue, description, everything is crammed into a big block ...