Raelyn723

Alright, I can see that a lot of people have pointed out the paragraphing so I won't do that, but make sure to remember that each time a new character ...

Hi again! I liked this chapter too, though there are still some parts that you could improve on. I'm not sure if I mentioned this when I reviewed the first ...

Hiya Hannah! I really liked this story, it was interesting and I've always liked legends, so this was really cool. I think it was a little confusing when you switched ...

You seem to have a very clear idea of where you are going with this story, which is a really good thing because I have no idea. I love how ...

This is a very intriguing start to a story. I like the concept here. In a way, it reminds me of movies, but it isn't written like one, which is ...

Hiya! I'm not that great at reviewing poetry, but I wanted to let you know what I thought! So, I thought this was amazing. You have a way of creating ...

This is a very intriguing story. It started out a little iffy, because it sounded slightly childish when you said "if you think this is a normal fairy tale..." but ...

This seems like a really great poem! I'm not good at reviewing poetry because it's just...not something I'm good at :) but I can tell that this is a really ...

Again, this chapter was very good and I liked that we got a little background on her relationship with Xander. I also like that you had her out there fighting ...

Wow. I think this is really good. I'm assuming it's a form of free verse right? I like that it took until the end for me to catch on (I ...

Well that was certainly a very dramatic part to leave us at! Seriously what are we supposed to do while we wait? Haha, as the rest of the parts were, ...

I like this a lot. I think the whole thing is very intriguing and it leaves me wanting to know more. I love that you started with action because it ...

I like this. It's sweet and sort of innocent in a way, and I think you get the message across really well. It is slightly predictable, like most of the ...

This was totally awesome! It was hilarious to read and you had a ton of great voice in there, but it didn't take away from the idea of the piece. ...

This was a good short story with a lot of potential! I really liked your idea here, and the characters have a whole lot more that you could carry on ...