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Hey there Eros! Let's dive right in. Two weeks passed by. Zask was ready with all the information and procedure for the new experiment. He left for his experiment hurriedly ...

Hey there occymay! I see you're wanting to send this off to some literary agencies, so I'll be fine-combing your work to see what I can find. Please don't take ...

Hey there jumpingsheep! Let's dive right in. Becca’s stomach dipped as she read the message. She read the message again, Repetition here doesn't suit what you're aiming to do too ...

Heyo Scar. A little late but let's jump in anyway. The book was small, bound in red leather and pressed with gold leaf. It looked old, far older than anything ...

Hey there kman! Let's dive right in. Something had gone array and much murmurs of dismay began echoing throughout the room. "Began echoing" turns past tense to present tense. While ...

Hey there kman! I haven't read the first chapter yet, but let's get right into this. I was taken aback by the dark apparition before me, terrified by its’ very ...

Hey there ghosts! Welcome to the site :D I hope you're enjoying your time here at YWS. Let's jump right in. Look me in the face and tell me what ...

Hey there Eros! Let's get right in It was 8 am. Zask was reading some books and wrote the following in his experimental journal: So how far is this ahead ...

Hey there Eros! Let's jump right in. A fair boy in his late teens was sitting in a blue comfy chair, his blue eyes staring widely at the screen of ...

Hi there, Shaw! Let's get right into this. Before I begin, I'll point out that this is all just one big block of text, and is extremely hard to read ...

Hey there Kira! Let's jump right in :D First of all, I like how you presented your title. Interesting. Take everything you think you know about the universe. I want ...

Hey there rebelpilot and a belated welcome to YWS! I hope you're finding everything well and are enjoying the site. So, some thoughts, before I get into some grammar stuff. ...

Hey there Gum! Let's get right into the review. First off, your imagery in the introduction feels a little rigid to me. Let's take a look: The hard, frozen ground ...

Hey there, Light. Let's jump right into it. From the sky, Ilal watched over the humans with Their shrewd eyes. Their doesn't need to be here. So, Ilal watched over ...

Hey Allison! Since I helped with the inspiration of this story, I find it's only right for me to review what you've written! Taking it full circle, I guess. I ...