Omi1

Hello. I'm finally here to review your work. :) Now, before reading anything, I think your title is too wordy, this makes it unappealing to your audience right away. Shorten ...

I want to start off by saying that was fabulous! I wasn't paying much attention to grammar (though I feel like you've got a good grasp on that), so my ...

Maybe I'm just really dense, but I don't fully understand this. The beginning makes sense, but correct me if I'm wrong. The rain is cleansing. It is erasing the mistakes ...

I really enjoyed how this told a story. It makes it all the more interesting. And throughout it all, you managed to maintain a bit of a rhythm and rhyme ...

Wow, Hsarver, this is supurb! I love how it starts out hopeless and depressing, and then in the most subtlest of ways and yet still very evident, you managed to ...

Its very short...if I were you I'd make it longer. I wouldn't exactly add more to the story, the events that occur are in a decent order and the end ...

"Everyone starts to wonder what your every step is," This is a rather awkward sentence. So is this, "Anger is usually your very first reaction to this." ... Let me ...

This poem is great. The rhyme scheme is well set up and so is the structure. It flows very smoothly and has a lot of emotion to it. But I ...

I really like how you've structured it. It immediately got my attention. :) And the imagery was fantabulous! Really, starting off your poem with phrases like "sweet scents", "wistfully awake", ...

Is this supposed to be that short? It feels really unfinished. And it doesn't seem to have much meaning behind it...I mean, the poem is written and structured well, but ...

I absolutely love the introduction. It is really captivating and just makes me want to read more. The use of short sentences is well done and it helps to set ...

I didn't really get the beginning. It sorta made sense and all, but there weren't any profound statements until the very end: "How I wish that I could move, (7) ...

I think the title is brilliant. And for a haiku, that was pretty good. Normally I can't stand short poems, they feel unfinished. This one, however, is good. It's also ...

This is awesome! It's good for a laugh. I really enjoy paradox's, a lot of them can be really entertaining, like this one. It's unique, you could have a lot ...

I love this...not because it was spectacular (I mean no offense by this, it was still well written) but because I can relate to this so well. Right now, I ...