Omi1

Ok so I looked at this and thought... "ugh! That's too long, I don't want to read that!" but I decided to give the first line a try and then ...

Ok, most of what I'm gonna say is gonna sound bad, not because I think your song is horrible, because it's anything but that, but because I really see this ...

I absolutely love the picture you've created! It is ever so descriptive, I can almost see everything about this castle: the obsidian brick dancing with a grim sort of wealth ...

Hey there! You listed this poem under general, but it still seems far too general...I just can't quite seem to figure out the overall message of the poem. Is it ...

Be less wordy: "You are one day gonna be no more" and "To be a better living being". And be more descriptive (in this sentence anyways, you do have some ...

I absolutely love the opening. It got my attention right from the start, even though I tend to steer clear of the longer poems. I thoroughly enjoy reading your work ...

Haha, clever. I really liked it. I can't see any obvious grammatical, punctuation, or spelling errors, so that's a good sign. :) I guess I'll get right to it then. ...

I'm not one for short poems, they seem to bare. No offense to your poem, but I hate how every time I read a short poem I'm intrigued right away ...

Wow! I love that this is so centered around Christ! Dbrick, you are awesome! And C. S. Lewis too...he is probably one of my favorite authors of all time! Lol...moving ...

Very interesting... I like it. It's unique in every regard, and I think the title matches it perfectly. However, it doesn't seem to be following any particular pattern as most ...

I've said this before, but I really do like this poem. It's short, but good. In many ways and for most people this poem is very relatable. At one point, ...

Now that is definitely unique! Some of the words didn't fit, but it was still good. All of the syllables were correctly matched up and the rhyming was great (though ...

Oooo! I like. The structuring is great and overall the poem flows very well. It was also very intriguing (a very important part to every piece of writing) and it ...

That was really well written. I enjoyed reading it, though I still think the intro to the star story was my favorite... Like I said, this one was good, but ...

"human teenage girl" this sounds slightly awkward. "I was looking up at my home, the sky." This was my first indication that I suspected her to be a star. I ...