Change Letting go of who i am,
losing the way i used to be.
Change is hard but its not fatal,
yet its killing me.
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I've said this before, but I really do like this poem. It's short, but good. In many ways and for most people this poem is very relatable. At one point, I'm sure everyone has felt overwhelmed by change. Like dbick said, there is contradiction in this poem...I'm not sure I like that bit or not. Contradiction isn't normally a good thing, but in this case it seems to demonstrate how confused change can make a person become.
Keep up the good work! I've enjoyed reading your work.
This is a simple but interesting poem. I was about to critique you about having a contradiction "Change is hard but its not fatal, yet its killing me." But after I really thought about it I realized that it isn't really a contradiction but rather a really good description of change. Change (usually) doesn't literally kill us, yet inside change causes so much stress and pain that sometimes it feels like it is killing us. Make sure to have "it's" instead of "its" in your poem. Overall a good poem!
thank you:)
Ignore the "Change" in the beggininng of the first sentence. that's not suppose to be there.