Mystique

Hello! I like the subject of your poem, its quite true and relevant and your description are nice too. I think that the flow could be better, the words are ...

Hey! Brilliant poem really, you have chosen the perfect words, there is a proper flow to the poem and of course, the message. A simple truth stated in many poems ...

Hello Rachel!! i loved your poem, mostly because i totally understand and agree with you!! its not music, its not art, but its always writing that can help let go ...

hello! no this surely isn't awful. Most writers write whatever hits them. The emotion in your poem is clear, but what this lacks is the flow. A rhyming scheme doesn't ...

the comparison makes your poem sound really good. usually, you see such feelings in a plain narrative. i would suggest using some better words, some lines don't seem right in ...

that was simply brilliant!!!! i loved the narration, i loved the egyptian references!! "bloody was his blade as war itself was given to it", "twins in both power and death" ...

i like your theme, its a really nice theme and while your words are nice, the problem is that one line doesn't flow into the other. i'd suggest highlighting a ...

i think that the descriptions were really good, a reader can totally understand Shira's emotions here. the thoughts and flashbacks helped along, so overall VERY good writing but i didn't ...

writing in this style is really difficult!! i loved the theme, i loved your words, i loved the ending. im glad there is no fixed rhyme scheme, that would have ...

i simply loved your poem! i don't know whether this is your first attempt at archaic writing, but this is really good. the exiled person would be one who doesn't ...

i just want to say that the thought behind this is beautiful but it would sound MUCH better without the rhyme. you shouldn't HAVE to find words to fit into ...

you have used appropriate words everywhere, so this sounds really nice. i really like the way you went from one phase of the dream to another, covering all the aspects ...