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Wow! REALLY, really insightful, thought provoking poem (at least, it was that for me).Well done! This is one of the issues the world is facing today-even emotions have been given ...

Really nice poem! :) It's well phrased and has a lot of expression (two things I believe vital for good writing). I think you misused two word though. In the ...

Fact: the French had a word which meant "left handed " and they used it to insult people in the earlier centuries. Marvellous poem! I like how your poems go ...

Aw, really cute poem! I am nuts for YWS, too, considering the amount of time I spend here (though that's also because of the fact that it's my summer holidays, ...

This was a very novel type of poem, one which I like. I ESPECIALLY like how you expressed going to the library as "fun''! Ha, I guess we are all ...

This is a very realistic description of most classrooms today! Especially mine, I have ZERO interest in school lately. And it feels like I am in some "tomb" indeed, except ...

I have a lot! 1.Nature: If you like writing about Nature, try these: Sunshine, Outer Space, Ants. You could also address the more deep topics, such as how pollution is ...

This one was easy! I was thinking "lion" when I read the title, but you wrote "striped coat" in the poem, so it has to be either a tiger or ...

Good one! The rhyming is up to mark, and so is the vocabulary usage and expression. It can't be anything but a hedgehog.......can it? Because you wrote that the coat ...

Wow.....this had me pause for a minute and...just.......let the words get ABSORBED into my brain. You've definitely made this person very pompous! I kept thinking of Percy Weasly from Harry ...

Hahaha, nice! This made me laugh. One thing, though: the punctuation is fine, except for the last line. "But he stays for, to leave, he has no plan". Here, I ...

Beautiful message! Thanks for this! Although the poem is simple and short, the message is very clear and I love it. It's true; we need to be thankful that we ...

Okay.......I think I like this chapter best of all. I do think that you've kept the pace of this story too fast, but that's fine. There are a few things ...

Hi! I liked this, since we seem to be getting in the heart of the story now. I like the concept of the "Better Place", but something confuses me. First, ...

Hi! I liked this chapter as you're improving your punctuation. :) However, one thing you need to do now is to write each person's speech in seperate paragraphs. I mean, ...